1	The Memo Demo Workshop Clarity, Tone and Audience in Writing Memos
2	Workplace Writing Forms letters/email reports (informational or analytical) memos proposals other Adapted from Allen, Jo. Writing in the Workplace. Massachusetts: Ally and Bacon, 1998. p.4
3	Workplace Writing Purposes to inform to persuade to clarify a related matter to instruct other
4	Workplace Writing Potential Audiences Supervisor Coworkers Subordinates Clients/Customers General Public Other
5	Form: Consistency There are different ways to format a memo, although you should follow some general guidelines on formatting All memorandum must be consistent: In terms of style: Margins should line up to create clean, straight lines down the left side of the page (no indentation of paragraphs) Section headings should all be the same size with the same font and relative location.
6	Templates for Specific Format Remember to consult a template when constructing a memorandum for a specific organization. This can be: a copy of a previous memo (SOM 301 Student Samples on webct) a guide-book outlining the proper forms for interoffice correspondence (SOM 301 textbook)
7	Initial Headings Date: December 30, 2003 > To: Vice President of Human Resources > From: Shauna Goldberg > Subject: Adopting Telecommuting as a New Company Practice > The first letter of all major words in the titles and headings should be capitalized.
8	Memo Format: Subject-line Subject-line titles in memos function like the tiles of reports: They announce the topic The memo should deal only with the single subject announced in the subject line Remember that the title in the subject line should not substitute for an opening that provides a context for the message VAGUE Subject: Adopting Telecommuting VAGUE Subject: A New Company Practice SPECIFIC Subject: Adopting Telecommuting as a New Company Practice
9	Suggested Format for Spacing and Margins Introduction does not need a heading. > First Section Heading > Single space between the section titles, paragraphs, and between sections. > Second Section Heading > Continue in this manner until the end of the memo. > Conclusion does not need a a heading.
10	Dividing a Memo into Sections: Headings Divide a memo into sections to clarify your points The order of the sections must be logical to develop meaning as a well-written essay The headings should be specific and clear to allow the reader some idea of the content of the whole memo. The introduction and conclusion do not take headings Examples of headings: Benefits of Telecommuting The Influence of Technology on Telecommuting Action Needed to Implement Change
11	Organization of Content A memo can be written in different ways. There is no right way to write a memo. The way you choose to write your memo depends on many things, including the purpose of the memo: Persuade Inform Instruct
12	Example: Organizing a Persuasive Memo Introduction: state the purpose of the memo Body: Explain the issue or address the problem. If there are two sides to the issue, explain both sides. Make your argument and explain the purpose that your argument serves. If you choose one side over the other, explain why. Use examples to illustrate your point and demonstrate why your argument is the best one. Present counter-arguments or actions needed to carry out the suggested action. Conclusion: Restate your argument in 1-2 sentences Use the last sentence to state how you will follow up
13	Clarity To write a clear memo, you must: avoid vague, wordy sentences use specific and relevant examples avoid the use of jargon and acronyms
14	Clarity Exercise: Introduction The following is an introduction of a memo. As you read it, pay close attention to clarity. To: Vice President of Human Resources From: Shauna Goldberg Subject: Adopting Telecommuting as a New Company Practice Telecommuting, or the employment practice of utilizing technological advances such as the internet to enable personnel to labor from their home computers and workplaces, is a flexible working opportunity that would significantly benefit our exemplary employees by giving them the option of working from home for some or even all of the time. Our wonderful organization would also benefit extraordinarily from adopting telecommuting as a new and improved company practice, therefore chiefly because flexible working has a really positive effect on peoples’ productivity and their individual professional motivation themselves. Our company should really highly consider adopting telecommuting as a new and unique form of work options for our employees.
15	Questions to Consider Related to Clarity Is this memo effective? How is it ineffective? How would you change it?
16	Comments on Clarity As you may have noticed, the memo has two main problems in terms of clarity: redundancy overly complex language How would you revise the introduction of this memo to be more clear?
17	Revision: Clear Introduction To: Vice President of Human Resources From: Shauna Goldberg Subject: Adopting Telecommuting as a New Company Practice Telecommuting is a flexible working opportunity that would give employees the ability to work from home some, or even all, of the time. Our organization would benefit from adopting telecommuting as a new company practice, as flexible working has a positive effect on productivity and motivation.
18	An Effective and Clear Introduction Telecommuting is a flexible working opportunity that would give employees the ability to work from home some, or even all, of the time. Our organization would benefit from adopting telecommuting as a new company practice, as flexible working has a positive effect on productivity and motivation.
19	Clarity throughout the Memo Remember that a clear introduction leads to an effective opening Of course, clarity should be maintained throughout the body and closing of the memo as well
20	Tone To use an appropriate tone, you must: specify the intended message and audience determine the desired tone: persuasive, angry, accommodating, etc. effectively utilize the appropriate tone through the use of language
21	Tone Exercise The following is the first section of the previous memo we looked at. Think about its tone: Benefits of Telecommuting I think telecommuting is a really good option, especially now-a-days. First, many people work so they don’t have a lot of time to spend with their family. But if we were to offer employees in our company the option to telecommute to work, they could spend more time with their family while working. So, for example, let’s say a working mother wants to raise her kids herself (without a babysitter); she could do that if she had the option to telecommute.
22	Questions to Consider Related to Tone What tone is used? Is this written to an equal, a subordinate, or a superior? If it is addressed to a superior, how would he/she react? If it is addressed to a coworker, does it use an appropriate tone?
23	Comments on Tone As you may have noticed, the memo is: Informal Casual Forceful In other words, it is written to an equal (perhaps a coworker).
24	Revisions Needed to Write to a Superior A memo to a coworker who is also a friend can be informal A memo to several readers or to a superior (such as a supervisor or a manager) should be formal. How would you revise the memo section to address a superior?
25	Revision: Addressing a Superior Benefits of Telecommuting In today’s society, many working men and women face poverty of time. As a result, some individuals are reluctant to work and want to spend more time with their family. However, offering both current and potential employees the option of telecommuting to work would allow them to arrange their time around their work, instead of their workplace. For instance, a mother who wants to raise her kids herself and pursue a career can do so by working at home instead of at the office.
26	Audience To argue your point effectively, you must consider your audience: understand how the audience is likely to feel about the information find common links with your audience consider what you want the audience to feel about the information
27	Examples to Illustrate Your Point Once you know: Your argument The tone you will use and The audience you will address… Use examples to illustrate your point.
28	Use of Examples In today’s society, many working men and women face poverty of time. As a result, some individuals are reluctant to work and want to spend more time with their family. However, offering both current and potential employees the option of telecommuting to work would allow them to arrange their time around their work, instead of their workplace. For instance, a mother who wants to raise her kids herself and pursue a career can do so by working at home instead of at the office.
29	Other Examples? Research to find other advantages of Telecommuting Come up with real-life examples to support your claim
30	Counter Arguments The following is the last section in the memo before the conclusion. Action Needed to Implement Change The company will have to make some exceptions in this new policy. First, some job functions cannot be performed through telecommuting and must be completed in the office. Furthermore, employees who feel more productive in the office should not feel pressured into adopting this practice. However, once an employee considers this option and decides that his or her working space at home does not hinder productivity, the organization can give the employee the option to telecommute.
31	Use of Counter Arguments The company will have to make some exceptions in this new policy. First, some job functions cannot be performed through telecommuting and must be completed in the office. Furthermore, employees who feel more productive in the office should not feel pressured into adopting this practice. However, once an employee considers this option and decides that his or her working space at home does not hinder productivity, the organization can give the employee the option to telecommute.
32	Exercise: Conclusion Write a possible conclusion to the telecommuting memo, keeping these in mind: Restate the argument in 1-2 sentences Use the last sentence to state how you will follow up with the issue
33	An Effective Conclusion By considering employees’ flexible working needs and implementing suitable technologies, the organization would benefit from adopting telecommuting as a new company practice. I will be happy to discuss this policy with you and will contact you next week so that we can work to implement this policy.
34	References on Telecommuting Duplessis, J. (2003, June 2). Telecommuting Works for Flexible Employers, Workers. Knight Ridder Tribune Business News, p 1. Retrieved September 28, 2003, from Proquest database (342877891). Fleming, T. (2003, June 2). Benefits of Taking the Superhighway to Work. Canadian HR Reporter, 16(11), G7. Retrieved September 28, 2003, from Proquest database (346530691).
35	Authors of “The Memo Demo” Josh Myers Sarah Pipher Danika Stefanko Shabnam Tehrani
36	"The End" The End